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January 30, 2017 at 3:48 pm #70961 Likes
The final draft of the second wave edition of the Book of Life is ready now.
as always, always need help with editing so if you see spelling/grammar errors, please report to firstname.lastname@example.org. Or just post them hereJanuary 31, 2017 at 8:41 am #70971 Likes
Pg 14. complet,e
Pg. 16. will be unite
Hi Michael, I found a couple typos in the intro.
I like how you laid out the 3 choices in the intro, it aligns with what I feel. The choice to come home, to choose truth,to choose love etc. I am glad you added that explanation!
My prayer for the cosmos:
May all beings be happy and free
~Gina MarieJanuary 31, 2017 at 3:19 pm #70991 Likes
thanks! for the kind words, and the grammatical corrections. Quicker I can get these ironed out, quicker I can get this out and move on. Currently working hard on a much needed rewrite of Dossier. Hopefully finished part one in two weeks. Final draft of the revision by end of March.February 4, 2017 at 3:30 pm #71041 Likes
Thanks for the preview. As always, nice timing : )
I found a few corrections as I was reading through the Time section:
Pg 52 the sentence “From outside the tube… ” ends with a period, should be a comma? Or incomplete sentence
Pg 56 “that is, you are reading them at a different location that I wrote them” should be than I wrote them
Pg 57 under The Eternal Now section:
“This is a perfectly correct.” missing a word?
MarcyFebruary 5, 2017 at 9:30 pm #71070 Likes
I found a few more:
Pg. 60 ” Every daily cycle… we can ascended universe.” ascend the
Pg. 61 “Stepping back a moment… be able to understand we I mean…” what I mean
Pg. 67 “…you are usually better of going with the flow…” better off
Pg. 69 “It depends”. ascension will only occur when the conditions in the tube…”
Ascension should be capitalized
Pg. 71 “…things would move forward faster As it stands, …” Period after faster
Pg. 72 “… could begin occurring in as little as five years from the.” check sentence ending
Pg. 73 “The bad news is… there is still lot work to do.” a lot of work to do
Pg. 73 “Individual’s in normal consciousness… ” Individuals
Pg. 78 “How long the moment of spiritual time last, …” lasts
Pg. 82 “…let us now take dive in…”
take a dive in Or let us now dive in
Thanks. I enjoyed the Prophets and Prophecy section!
MarcyFebruary 5, 2017 at 11:55 pm #71081 Likes
Pg 55 bottom of page “Everything happening in the water in tub in front of you…” the tub
Pg 64 “It is bad enough I am telling that the future can impact the past…” telling you
MarcyFebruary 6, 2017 at 1:07 pm #71090 Likes
this is so awesome. thanks so much. it really helps me a lot.February 7, 2017 at 12:07 am #71100 Likes
Ok. Here are some more:
Pg 24 footnote ” … take a desire creative outcome…” desired
Pg 27 footnote “Now that you understand the basic relationship between the energy, Source, and of creation…” check wording
further down in footnote “Closer to source its easier…” it’s
Pg 27 “The universe is manifest and created through a process…”
should be manifested ?
Pg 29 ….four stages of creation operates at a different “quantum level. missing ”
Pg 31 ” …even the slugs and snails ( in other words, everything that exists are around) … ” should be all around ?
Pg 32 near bottom of page “…cellular structures to remain stable, they must nurtured…” must be nurtured
Pg 33 “Therefore, we walk a razors edge…” razor’s edge
Pg 34 “This is not knew news by any means.” new news ?
Pg 35 “As the vibration of this planet rises… any conscious or unconscious intent may have, …” you may have
Pg. 36 first sentence missing period at the end.
Pg. 36 “In the long term in can even kill us.” it can
Pg. 40 beginning of page “We may represent this important mystical truth… like so.” should end with :
Pg. 40 “…you use force of your hands to push and prod…” the force
Pg. 40 “In the Yin/Yan system, …” Yin/Yang
Pg. 40 check spacing after the italicized word “emanating”
Pg 41 “It is important to know that under…” Check the u in the word under, it is not italicized
MarcyFebruary 7, 2017 at 9:55 am #71110 Likes
A few more:
Pg 41 Yin/ Shakti Introducing the term Shakti here is confusing, I think you would need to add some yoga philosophy in the text if you use that term?
Pg 48 “transcending”68” extra quotation mark
Pg 58. Red letter text needs review. I think the last sentence should be black
Pg 58. sit one ->on
Pg 61 understand we I mean when I say
Pg 68. Wherever You stick its monadic finger,
Pg 70 onc such technology
Pg 72 five years from the.
Pg 75 best guest
My prayer for the cosmos:
May all beings be happy and free
~Gina MarieFebruary 8, 2017 at 9:14 am #71120 Likes
Thank you, thank you, thank you. The only way to catch all the errors is for multiple people to work on it. I find there are errors I see that others don’t, and I find there are errors that others see that I don’t. thanksFebruary 8, 2017 at 1:54 pm #71130 Likes
A few more from the beginning of the book I spotted. Apologies if some are duplicates.
Pg 14 “…this for two reasons.” this is
Pg 14 “The first reason that it is a big because as it progresses, …” check sentence, missing words The first reason it is a big deal is because as it progresses…
Pg 15 footnote “You will explore… as you wend our way…” wend your way
Pg 18 “As you will remember as you read book…” read this book
Pg 19 “… so you continue with your privilege…” you can continue
Pg 19 footnote “… it historical roots” its
Pg 20 check sentence “Not only that, but I (and many others) are here to help.” take out “but” ? rewording needed? grammar seems wrong
Pg 45. “1. Take a few deep breathes.”
Pg. 45 “Before we get to all that… in next chapter …” in the next chapter
Pg 45 footnote missing second parenthesis
Pg 55 footnote missing parenthesis i.e. you)
Pg 58 footnote 84 extra dash at the end of sentence
Pg. 58 footnote 85 “… when they have a mystical experience experience/ realize spiritual time…” check sentence, missing a comma/words?
Pg 78 footnote “…the brains Default Mode Network…” brain’s
MarcyFebruary 9, 2017 at 10:48 am #71141 Likes
and some more:
Pg 12 companion to this this book double word.
Pg 14 The first reason that it is a big______ should have ”thing” or “deal” after big or remove word (a )
Pg 32 Down here, creation is also limited also by its sensitivity too many alsoFebruary 9, 2017 at 1:06 pm #71151 Likes
awesome awesome awesome. It is hard to believe there are so many errors in this.
I’ve uploaded a cleaner version based on all these edits. if anybody else is going to look at it, please start with the cleaner version
thanks again. I very much appreciate all your helpPut something useful here
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